I’d say it was “fair/ok/average” – a lot better than some people I’ve heard – but you would be better asking native speakers. Obviously, *most* questions are better off being answered by native speakers, but pronunciation more so than say grammar or kanji usage.

I listened to only about the first two minutes. It started really good, then decreased in quality I think…

Here are my suggestions:

1. Don’t slur so much. You slured each syllable together so much, sometimes you stumbled and I couldn’t tell what you said. Focus on saying each sound individually, rather than attempting to slur like you would in English. The natural slur comes in time.

2. Speak with heart! I don’t know if you normally speak like a robot, but it’s definitely not good! Put some feelings behind your words~

Hopefully I didn’t crush you too much :O. Good luck in improving! ♪(´ε｀ )

I don’t know if it was the “being tired” thing or what but you should make sure to pronounce your た properly. You were saying “Deshituh(ka)” a lot of the time instead of “DeshiTA(ka)”